Friday, 13 May 2016

Paragraph about the shoes

Here is mine and Zahra's collaborative piece of writing. We had to plan, we had to use the 5 personification, smell, hear, feel, see and taste. After planning we had to sit back to back and take turns writing sentences. At the end we then did editing. Our LI: to use the 5 personification to help us paint a picture with words. We had to pretend that we were the shoes.

1 comment:

  1. A wonderful picture painted with words girls. I really like the inclusion of your feelings of jealousy, as the reader they make you think about what the poor shoes are going through. Well done!